A girl walking by
Remarkable resemblance to the one
Who shattered my heart a long ago
I could not help staring
She looked away
can not help but feel sad when one reads this . in such a small verse you have such a gift of expression for people many who would relate to this beeutiful always beez :))
Thank you, beeze, for such a kind comment. It happened many decades ago, but strange, still so vivid.
Heartfelt the melancholy, I can see a life story in these words.
Thank you. I really appreciate your noticing this one.
Beautifully touching. So much said in so few words.
Thank you for reading my story-poem. I really appreciate it.
The last one word line brilliantly catches the non-linearity of time and the enduring power of the heart. Sensitive and expressive of the vulnerability that is one of the most beautiful attributes of our humanity. Thank you :))
Such an incisive brilliant comment that further deepened what the poem was meant to say.
You better be glad (hope that didn’t come across too harshly). (Aside: go back to the poem and trace the shape of it with your finger—- what do you see? An almost heart? Take care. There is hope)
Absolutely brilliant. It conveys tremendous emotion, and rings absolutely true. That final word– Again– is a stroke of genius which takes the poem to a higher level. The construction and design (the symmetry of the words and lines themselves) is also brilliant. It’s not just a poem, it’s a remarkable short story. One of your very best, sir.
I’m humbled. For such a kind comment I can’t find words to express my appreciation. I’m really encouraged.
Your writing style just blow me away! # inspired#…. I am controlling myself to be too emotional Right now;)
La Vie Est Belle…..
I’m always grateful when someone feels somthing from my poems in a positive way. Merci!
Brilliantly penned, Ashi! Absolutely beautiful!
Beautiful…I love this!
I like and I understand this poem. I made some wishes upon similar beauties and was lucky. They left me be. No weakness in the amazing poetry,
When someone reads my words and feels something in common, there is nothing that pleases me more. Thank you.
You are welcome.
Very poignant… I think many men go through this everyday…
memory we have those who significantly changed our lives … for the better and for the worse too 🙂 it will be fine 🙂
Your poem says so much in few words. I really like this one.
Thank you. Your comment really encourages me.
that ‘again’ standing alone in the end says it all
Oh this is moving and intriguing at once lovely!
In my days, I could only like or love a girl from a distance. Wonder if that distance still exists.
It’s always easier from a distance, minus all the drama…:-), thank you AshiAkira!
the close is perfect. well done!
Thank you for such a kind comment. Very much appreciated.
This poem is a masterpiece….
I have nominated you for Brotherhood of the world Blogger Award… check here…
Love the heart 🙂
Thank you. Glad you do. 🙂
Enjoyed reading this.
I’m glad you did.
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