Narrow water stream

Narrow water stream

Dug for kids in the playground

Crows are bathing

About AshiAkira

AshiAkira. Author of Haiku Poems and Haiku Poems II(www.lulu.com/shop/ashi-akira/haiku-poems/paperback/product-23152158.html). Old resident of Tokyo.
This entry was posted in Haiku. Bookmark the permalink.

4 Responses to Narrow water stream

  1. Ron says:

    Good morning, Sir (4:36 a.m. Texas time),

    I wanted to try another version of your most excellent haiku. This is the best I have done so far:

    children look
    with envy — crows fluttering
    in the playground stream

    I’m not 100% pleased with it, but what do you think? Does it have any merit? *** 🙂 ***

    With Respect and Admiration,

    Ron Evans — HaikuOdyssey

  2. I love the last line:)

Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out /  Change )

Google photo

You are commenting using your Google account. Log Out /  Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out /  Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out /  Change )

Connecting to %s