Narrow water stream

Narrow water stream

Dug for kids in the playground

Crows are bathing

About AshiAkira

AshiAkira. Author of Haiku Poems and Haiku Poems II( Old resident of Tokyo.
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4 Responses to Narrow water stream

  1. Ron says:

    Good morning, Sir (4:36 a.m. Texas time),

    I wanted to try another version of your most excellent haiku. This is the best I have done so far:

    children look
    with envy — crows fluttering
    in the playground stream

    I’m not 100% pleased with it, but what do you think? Does it have any merit? *** 🙂 ***

    With Respect and Admiration,

    Ron Evans — HaikuOdyssey

  2. I love the last line:)

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